Imaginary Travel Opening, First Draft

This is the first version of the opening for Imaginary Travel, my effort for Script Frenzy this year. I’m moving in a slightly different direction at the moment, but I wanted to get something out on the Interwebs to share with the world. Comment away! Let me know if I’m on the right track.

Teaser

Scene A

Fade In:

INT.

IMAGINARY TRAVEL OFFICES – DAY

The slick front room of Imaginary Travel is covered in

tasteful posters advertising vacations in Wonderland, Naboombu, and the Shire.

DAVID MADISON leans over his desk, engaged with the couple

across from him who are planning a vacation.

DAVID

Well the Isle of Naboombu is always a great choice for first

timers. The locals love having visitors.

MAN 1

We were thinking something a little different...(pauses

uncomfortably) My wife here suggested I ‘go to Hell.’ We talked about it, and

well, we thought why not?

WOMAN 1

We thought it would be exciting! Maybe just what we need to

get that spark back...

DAVID

There’s just one problem with that plan. (DAVID squirms) Hell

isn’t an (stressing this point) imaginary place.

MAN 1

Well I don’t believe in Hell, so it’s imaginary to me right?

DAVID

I’m afraid it doesn’t work that way. If it did, my colleague

over there would be sending everyone to Heaven. He doesn’t believe in that

either!

David motions to the next desk over where TYLER UNGAR is

shaking the hand of a client, clearly just ending a transaction.

Fade Out.

Act One

Scene B

INT.

IMAGINARY TRAVEL OFFICES / BREAK ROOM – DAY

Tyler is standing in the featureless break room talking with

fellow employee Trisha. Tyler holds a mug with the molecular model of caffeine

on it. Posters for OSHA and employee vacations hang on the walls.

TYLER

Seriously, he was trying to tell that family that the reason

we don’t have a vacation to Hell is because it’s a real place! Apparently no

one wanting to visit a world of eternal suffering isn’t a good enough reason.

And it’s not like Satan would abide by the proper treaties anyway.

TRISHA

Well he is entitled to his own opinion...

TYLER

Just because he believes in the place doesn’t make it real.

TRISHA

I suppose

(clearly not won over by this line of reasoning)

Garret, mid twenties, smartly dressed, enters the staff room.

GARRET

Tyler! I’m so glad I found you! I’m moving out!

TYLER

Wait, what!?

(dumbfounded)

GARRET

I was going top tell you this morning, but I always forget

you get up before noon.

TYLER

Yeah. (dryly) I have a job.

GARRET

I have a job. Well I had a job until this morning.

TYLER

Lord. (exasperated) They fire you from Quick Copy?

GARRET

No. I quit. But that’s not the point.

TYLER

Hurry up and get to it then will you?

GARRET

You remember George?

TYLER

The faux hawk guy you met last month?

GARRET

No. That’s Tom. He’s old news. No, George, from Shane’s party

last week?

TYLER

Oh.  Right. BMW guy.

GARRET

Yeah. He’s asked me to move in with him!

(jumping up and down

with excitement)

TYLER

Um...doesn’t he live in Idaho?

GARRET

Of course not! (waits a beat) He lives in Montana. On a

ranch! George love horses AND BMWs. And he’s a total sweetheart. But of course

that presents a tiny little problem...

TYLER

Like that lease renewal we just signed?

GARRET

I already talked to the apartment office. Since it’s a joint

leases, you just need to find a new roommate to sign on with you.

TYLER

And where am I supposed to find one of those?

GARRET

That’s the best part. I’ve totally worked it out for you. See

when I was on my way in here I ran into one of your coworkers. His lease is up

and his current roommates are going to bum around Europe for a while so he

needs a new place.

TYLER

You don’t mean who I think you mean?

GARRET

(going over to the break room door)

Heya David, come on in!

TYLER

Rally Garret, he is your solution? In what scenario does this

end well?

INT. FAST

FOOD RESTURANT

Tyler and David sit in a booth at the local fast food burrito

place.

DAVID

I love my roommates,  but they’ve decided to up and

leave.

TYLER

I know the feeling!

DAVID

Sorry man, that’s a shitty move your roommate pulled.

TYLER

Yeah.

DAVID

But it’s lucky he ran into me! Its been so long since I had

to find a place to live, I’ve almost forgotten how. And I hate doing recon and

finding a new roommate.

TYLER

I know! It took me a month and 27 applicants before I found

Garret. Just didn’t factor in his penchant for running away.

DAVID

Well there is that.

TYLER

We just seem like such an odd pairing. The gay atheist and

the chaplain student living together.

DAVID

Look, you’re a good guy. If you got a good head on your

shoulders and good heart that select care about.

Tyler

Well I can’t really say no to that.

2 thoughts on “Imaginary Travel Opening, First Draft

  1. Great possibilities. As a former screen writer ‘fixer’ just a suggestion: each scene no longer needs a “letter” or “a number” just drop down to Exterior or Interior, and then describe what you want the viewer to see or imagine.

    You know I admire all your work. So, last night (2/28/12) I had a dream about a past life and saw you in it which encouraged me to check up on my former imac teacher.

    A very belated and happy birthday to a brilliant soul and kind spirit–I no longer keep up with facebook, do not understand how to do twitter (alas), and still looking for a teacher for Microsoft ‘Word’……be well, and hope to hug you one of these days.

    I’ve also just finished reading the Isaacson biog. on Jobs–too bad he left out the creation of selling imac by customers learning in lessons to use it.
    No one would be reading any books if teachers were not teaching folks reading, comprehension, and the joy of the two combined.

    Miss you. Hugs, Cynthia Ryan

  2. Had teachers not taught reading and comprehension,
    who could communicate higher thought to change lives?
    Or civilizations? Miss you Adam. Kind thoughts+much
    success in your life. Former Student, Cynthia Ryan

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