I re-wrote the first act of Imaginary Travel to flesh out the characters and circumstances a bit more. Again, let me know what you think.

This is the first version of the opening for Imaginary Travel, my effort for Script Frenzy this year. I'm moving in a slightly different direction at the moment, but I wanted to get something out on the Interwebs to share with the world. Comment away! Let me know if I'm on the right track.